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The graph presents the trend of household with personal computers in America from 1980 to 1988.

The line shows a uniformly upward trend in the eight years. In 1980, the percentage of personal computers in household is 0.2%. That is to say, only two families in every one thousand families in America had their own computers at that time. However, things had going to be quite different in 1988, when the figure raised up to 21%, 105 times of that in 1980.

The curve reveals a sharp rise during the 1982-1983 period. In 1982, five families in every one thousand families possessed personal computers. The percentage increased to 10% in 1983. During 1983 to 1987, the slope of the line decreases, which means that the growth becomes dull. The percentage increases merely by 10% in this four-year period. In the 1987-1988 period, the growth of household with personal computers in the US slowed down again: that year, the increase is simply 1%.

这篇文章的问题在于：1.句法简单，几乎没有复杂结构，楼主至少要用到插入句，动名词开头，类比之类的吧。 2.用词重复，单一。percentage在文章反复出现，楼主可以尝试表达比例的其他句法，比如account for ,proportion之类的。 3. 很平淡。感觉读下来就没有波澜，lz多看看雅思的范文里的对句子和段落的处理，平淡的文章肯定得不了高分