是Task1
图片无法传上来，大家主要看语法错误，和单词拼写错误哈，谢谢



The graph presents the trend of household with personal computers in America from 1980 to 1988.

The line shows a uniformly upward trend in the eight years. In 1980, the percentage of personal computers in household is 0.2%. That is to say, only two families in every one thousand families in America had their own computers at that time. However, things had going to be quite different in 1988, when the figure raised up to 21%, 105 times of that in 1980.

The curve reveals a sharp rise during the 1982-1983 period. In 1982, five families in every one thousand families possessed personal computers. The percentage increased to 10% in 1983. During 1983 to 1987, the slope of the line decreases, which means that the growth becomes dull. The percentage increases merely by 10% in this four-year period. In the 1987-1988 period, the growth of household with personal computers in the US slowed down again: that year, the increase is simply 1%.

自己没考个雅思,从IBT的经验来说,没什么语法问题,几乎没有,但是词汇比较低级,全是高中词汇...建议,自己尝试用一些高级词汇替换.
因为没考过,也不知道要求...我个人感觉了

Quote:

引用第0楼wenqiang于2007-07-07 11:58发表的求雅思作文批改:
是Task1
图片无法传上来，大家主要看语法错误，和单词拼写错误哈，谢谢



.......

http://192.168.2.5/read.php?tid=361097&page=1#0
有蝈蝈发的，可以看一下