The inspiring behavior of the teenager will certainly give an impetus to our society to bocome more civilized and harmonious

由于我是刚对英语产生兴趣,有些语法与用词还不是很清楚
impetus to our society to bocome more civilized and harmonious 这个句式正确吗?

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引用第2楼weileizhe于2007-01-16 19:18发表的:
楼主应该这样说更地道通顺 ：The inspiring behavior of the teenager will certainly give an impetus to our society ,which will make our society bocome more civilized and harmonious. 其中which代表前面的The inspiring behavior of the teenager will certainly give an impetus to our society 整个部分。这是个人意见啊 ，楼主自己比较选择。

根本不用这样大动干戈...很罗嗦这样。

LZ的句子看着头重脚轻就是因为give an impetus to.... 而且give to become不通...
这个是中国英语....把这个东西换成一个动词就好了，比如propel


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引用第2楼weileizhe于2007-01-16 19:18发表的:
楼主应该这样说更地道通顺 ：The inspiring behavior of the teenager will certainly give an impetus to our society ,which will make our society bocome more civilized and harmonious. 其中which代表前面的The inspiring behavior of the teenager will certainly give an impetus to our society 整个部分。这是个人意见啊 ，楼主自己比较选择。

另外，从逻辑上来讲，which指代的是the inspiring behavior，而不是整个的句子，那样不通..，而且which指代前面一整句的情况也不是这样用的，句子这样写读起来很别扭。

其实这样写就是： The inspiring behavior of the teenager will certainly ...., and....
and 连接the inspiring behavior的两个动词....