Shoud the university campus refuse tourtiets
  These days,more and more people enjoy visiting local university campus when they are on their  travelling way.Some people think it is accetaple but others don't think so.
    In order to avoid frequencely visiting,which may interupt the normal studying,some people suggest that campus shoud forbidden tourists' visiting..They say if people come to school now and soon,the  students will lost their hearts on studying,and tourists may take some unhealthy in.
    But on others' opinion,tourists come to school won't interupt at all.They think when we are colleage students we all beacome social man  and campus life is one of it.So tourists shouldn't refused.
    What I think is we shoudn't refuse the visitor,but we may shoud shut down the campus in some special days.

请各位XDJM施以援手，谢谢。

有奖励不??

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引用第1楼水木于2007-11-20 11:39发表的  :
有奖励不??

看情况，觉得不错就送FY。。。。呵呵

怎么没有哪个蝈蝈出手
帮忙咯

提一些语病:
大学校园,不用university campus 直接用campus就行
当他们旅行时  while they are on their  vocation
定语不用副词,frequencely用frequent
interupt拼写错误双R
suggest  ... shoud  (后加动词原形)forbid
不时的now and soon不对
will 后加动词原形lose
lose  their hearts 这个说法好像也不对
shouldn't be refused
  总体句式挺多,用的词语也挺多,但是动词错误很多,而且内容很少.这是主要需要改进的.本人所学有限,仅供参考.如有错误,请见谅.

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引用第4楼chanel于2007-11-20 11:54发表的  :
提一些语病:
大学校园,不用university campus 直接用campus就行
当他们旅行时  while they are on their  vocation
定语不用副词,frequencely用frequent
interupt拼写错误双R
.......

谢谢，改天给你浮云，后天继续帮我来改吧。我英语文章很烂。

frequencely visiting      frequent visiting  (frequencely貌似是副词)
shoud forbidden    should forbide（这是forbide的完成时，应该用原形吧~~`原形可能是这样，也可能不对，我只是纠正个语法错误）
lost  lose
take some unhealthy in.  unhealthy是副词，这里应该再加个名词吧。。。最简单的应该是加个things
But on others' opinion,tourists come to school won't interupt at all.  opinion后应该加个S代表大多数人的意见  后面的应该是that  tourists come to school won't interupt at all.
beacome                      become
So tourists shouldn't refused.                So tourists shouldn't be refused.
这是我的个人水平，改得不对请见谅哈

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引用第6楼helloejie于2007-11-20 12:05发表的  :
frequencely visiting      frequent visiting  (frequencely貌似是副词)
shoud forbidden    should forbide（这是forbide的完成时，应该用原形吧~~`原形可能是这样，也可能不对，我只是纠正个语法错误）
lost  lose
take some unhealthy in.  unhealthy是副词，这里应该再加个名词吧。。。最简单的应该是加个things
But on others' opinion,tourists come to school won't interupt at all.  opinion后应该加个S代表大多数人的意见  后面的应该是that  tourists come to school won't interupt at all.
.......

谢谢，很中肯

希望以后还来

我看来the  students will lost their hearts on studying这句话可能不是很准确

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引用第8楼光明使者于2007-11-20 12:24发表的  :
我看来the  students will lost their hearts on studying这句话可能不是很准确

谢谢蝈蝈

These days,more and more people enjoy visiting local university campus when they are on their  travelling way.Some people think it is accetaple but others don't think so.

--These days, more and more people prefer to choose local universities as their travelling sites. Some people think it's acceptable but others don't.

They say if people come to school now and soon,the  students will lost their hearts on studying,and tourists may take some unhealthy in.

--According to their view, if people come to university every now and then, the students will lose their focus on studying, this, of course, is harmful to the students themselves as well as the management of the campus.. 

    But on others' opinion,tourists come to school won't interupt at all.They think when we are colleage students we all beacome social man  and campus life is one of it.So tourists shouldn't refused.

-- But in others' opinion, tourists coming to school won't be a interuption at all. They insist that university students should be involved into the society. And letting tourists in is one of the ways to make it happen.

    What I think is we shoudn't refuse the visitor,but we may shoud shut down the campus in some special days.

-- In my opinion, the universities should consider when and where the tourists could visit, instead of rejecting them all outside the campus.

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引用第10楼channing于2007-11-20 16:18发表的  :
These days,more and more people enjoy visiting local university campus when they are on their  travelling way.Some people think it is accetaple but others don't think so.

--These days, more and more people prefer to choose local universities as their travelling sites. Some people think it's acceptable but others don't.

They say if people come to school now and soon,the  students will lost their hearts on studying,and tourists may take some unhealthy in.
.......

谢谢斑竹

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